Assignment Instructions One of the most important aspects of the learning process is applying feedback provided by your instructor. For this Assignment, here is what you need to do. Review your instructor’s comments and the iRubric carefully. Revise your first essay (Essay 1, Week 2) to show that you understand and have applied the feedback provided.  (Example: Perhaps you were marked down for using second person (you): “You are exposing yourself to many dangers if you smoke.” Simply correct the error: “Smoking presents many dangers.” The sentence is now in third person.) Save your essay as follows: Smith_REVISED_Essay1. We will not use Turnitin for this Assignment since your essay was previously submitted. Please note that your essay will NOT be regraded. Your instructor will examine your paper to see if you have made the necessary corrections. If so, you will receive full credit for this Assignment. (Important: It is unlikely that you will receive partial credit for this Assignment. If you have not made the necessary corrections, your instructor might ask you to revise and resubmit before you are given full credit. Your success in this course hinges on your learning from feedback, so you must be able to demonstrate that your writing is improving as we move along in this course.) Finally, at the bottom of your essay (after paragraph five), please respond the following questions. Do you understand your feedback?  Do you have any questions for your instructor? Do you have any problems or concerns that you would like to discuss with your instructor? Is there anything we can do to help? That’s it! Good luck and let me know if you have questions.    at the bottle my teacher said i did this wrong someone fix this

Sherman williams APU  Effects of Smoking  Smoking in detrimental to the body of consumers. It affects all the body parts thus rendering the humans to multiple diseases which reduces the health soundness of the individuals. In U. S, over 480,000 deaths annually are caused by smoking cigarette. More deaths has occurred in the U. S due to smoking than the deaths caused by war in U. S. over 90% of the smokers die due to lung cancer. This affects alveoli which then reduces the effectiveness of lungs thus causing respiratory complications (Peinado, 3069). Cigarette smoking increases the risk of chronic obstructive pulmonary disease (COPD). The rate of development of heart disease and stroke is higher in smokers. Two out of four smokers are likely to suffer from coronary heart disease and stroke than nonsmokers.  The diminished health of the smokers increases work absenteeism and thus lowers productivity of smokers in various sector of the economy. Frequency of hospitalization and treatments of the diseases caused by smoking cigarette raises the cost of healthcare, strains the healthcare facilities and eats into the resource of the victims (Sayin, 201). Smoking also damages the victims’ blood vessels. It thickens or causes them to become narrow thus hampering the blood flow and pressure. Narrow blood vessels increase blood pressure and also may lead to vessel clotting thus blockages. Brain parts, legs and other body parts are deprived from blood circulation and some vessels may burst spilling blood in the brain. The cells die due to lack of oxygen and nutrition thus causing gaining or sudden deaths (Peinado, 3069). Smoking affects the mouth odor and the color of the victims’ teeth. Smokers’ breath is usually smelly. The teeth turn brown and gums may develop complications which will result to tooth rloss. In women, smoking reduces their fertility rates and increases cases of still births. Preterm delivery, Sudden infant death syndrome, ectopic pregnancy and birth of infants with orofacial clefts is frequent. Children from smoking mothers are usually lighter compared with normal children. Smoking reduces the strength of bones and thus increases the risk of broken bone (Sayin, 202). Other impacts of smoking include reduction of the sight of the victims. It may trigger an age-related macular degeneration (AMD) which retards vision. It causes type 2 diabetes mellitus and also makes the control of the disease difficulty. Smoking also causes body inflammation and decreases the immunity of the victims. It is also known to initiate rheumatoid arthritis (Sayin, 204). Definitely having carefully read through the feedbacks, I understand them. Consequently, I do not have any question, problem or concerns that I would like to discuss with the instructor over the essay.  My take is that a lot has been done to bail me out and will try my best to improve on the essay.      Work cited Peinado, Victor I., et al. “Plasma Levels Of Angiopoietin-2 In COPD: Effects Of Smoking And Pulmonary Hypertension.” B27. HYPOXIA AND THE PULMONARY VASCULATURE: BREATHLESS IN SAN FRANCISCO. American Thoracic Society, 2016. A3069-A3069. Sayin, Nihat, et al. “Effects of chronic smoking on central corneal thickness, endothelial cell, and dry eye parameters.” Cutaneous and ocular toxicology 33.3 (2014): 201-205.

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Feedback Please review the directions to this assignment. You are to read the comments sent to you on Essay One.   Then you are to use those comments to REVISE that essay. You keep turning in some essay about smoking and your essay ONE was NOT about smoking. Smoking is not even a topic that could be used for Essay One. You wrote about  a Christmas trip to Jerusalem for Essay One.  I will happily change your grade when you resubmit.

 

Name: 

Using the provided quotes from The Glass Castle, and support from a provided article, explain how Jeannette Walls was a victim of child abuse.  Make sure your quotes properly support your argument and are integrated into your response.  Your body paragraphs should be written in ALICE format. 

Thesis statement (one sentence focusing on two main points):

Body paragraph 1 (focusing on FIRST main point from thesis statement):

Body paragraph 2 (focusing on SECOND main point from thesis statement):

The Glass Castle Quotes About Abuse:

“I am your mother, and I should have a say in how you’re raised” (Walls 26).

“Mom felt that Grandma Smith nagged and badgered, setting rules and punishments for breaking the rules. It drove Mom crazy, and it was the reason she never set rules for us” (Walls 21).

“Some parents worried that their kids might get hit by lightning, but Mom and Dad never did, and they let us go out and play in the warm, driving water. We splashed and sang and danced” (Walls 16).

“If you don’t want to sink, you better figure out how to swim” (Walls 66).

“We had no pillows, but Dad said that was part of his plan. He was teaching us to have good posture. The Indians didn’t use pillows, either, he explained, and look how straight they stood” (Walls 18). 

“‘It was the only thing to eat in our house,’ I said. Raising my voice, I added, ‘I was hungry’” (Walls 69).

“You’re not supposed to laugh at your own father, ever” (Walls 83). 

“He simply waited for me to fork over the cash, as if he knew I didn’t have it in me to say no” (Walls 209).

“She’d been reading books on how to cope with an alcoholic, and they said that drunks didn’t remember their rampages, so if you cleaned up after them, they’d think nothing had happened. ‘Your father needs to see the mess he’s making of our lives,’ Mom said. But when Dad got up, he’d act as if all the wreckage didn’t exist, and no one discussed it with him. The rest of us had to get used to stepping over broken furniture and shattered glass” (Walls 113).

“Unloved children grow up to be serial murderers or alcoholics” (Walls 83).

“At times I felt like I was failing Maureen, like I wasn’t keeping my promise that I’d protect her–the promise I’d made to her when I held her on the way home from the hospital after she’d been born. I couldn’t get her what she needed most–hot baths, a warm bed, steaming bowls of Cream of Wheat before school in the morning–but I tried to do little things” (Walls 206). 

“‘Okay, kids’ Dad said, ‘the civilians are revolting. We better skeddadle'” (Walls 109). 

“When Dad went crazy, we all had our own ways of shutting down and closing off, and that was what we did that night” (Walls 115). 

“‘Your father’s the only one who can help himself,’ Mom said. ‘Only he knows how to fight his own demons'” (Walls 117). 

“Just remember,” Mom said after examining the blisters, “what doesn’t kill you will make you stronger.”  “If that was true, I’d be Hercules by now,” Lori said (Walls 179). 

“Being homeless is an adventure” (Walls 255). 

“We may not have insulation,” Mom said as we all gathered around the stove, “but we have each other” (Walls 177). 

 

At a minimum, each student will be expected to post an original and thoughtful response to the DB question and contribute to the weekly dialogue by responding to at least two other posts from students. The first contribution must be posted before midnight (Central Time) on Friday of each week. Two additional responses are required after Friday of each week. Students are highly encouraged to engage on the Discussion Board early and often, as that is the primary way the university tracks class attendance and participation.

The purpose of the Discussion Board is to allow students to learn through sharing ideas and experiences as they relate to course content and the DB question. Because it is not possible to engage in two-way dialogue after a conversation has ended, no posts to the DB will be accepted after the end of each unit.

Assignment:

Now that you have written about the topic that you selected in Unit 1, it is time to explore what others have said about that same topic. To begin the process, use the AIU library databases and online search tools to locate at least 6 sources that are related to your topic.

The best way to begin this search is by first reading encyclopedia articles on the topic, especially the encyclopedias in the AIU library. Encyclopedia articles provide a summary of current information and, most important, a list of books and articles about the topic. You can often find titles of useful works at the end of encyclopedia articles.

Remember, encyclopedias and other reference books (online or print) can be consulted, but their information cannot be cited in your paper. This means that material from reference works cannot be quoted or summarized in your paper. Reference works help you begin your exploration of a topic; however, reference works do not contain original material and therefore cannot be cited in your paper.

After consulting reference works, locate at least 6 credible sources related to your topic. These published works will inform you of arguments that are related to your topic. They can also provide evidence (facts, statistics, quotations, and examples) to support your own thesis and main points in the research paper that you will write later in the course.

There are two types of citations in APA style: in-text citations and reference citations. An in-text citation is an abbreviation. A reference citation lists all relevant information about a source. The following is a paragraph from a research paper on preventing juvenile delinquency that illustrates the difference between in-text and reference citations:

According to one expert, “Numerous warning signs can alert parents to children who are at risk of violent behavior later in life” (Friedman, 2014). Parents know that a child does not suddenly have moods swings and violent outbursts without some warning sign. Recognizing these signs in childhood can help prevent adolescent delinquency.
Friedman, J. (2014). The terror within: Recognizing and dealing with violent tendencies in children. Pediatrics for Parents, 23(4), 13.

The author and date in parentheses (Friedman, 2014) is an in-text citation. It appears in the sentence where the source was used and is an abbreviated form of the reference citation. All of the information in the paragraph was the student writer’s except what was in the sentence that included an in-text citation.

After the paragraph, you can see the full reference citation of the source. The reference citation provides all of the information that someone would need to find this source.

Complete the following for your assignment:

• Create a list of 6 sources that you will find useful in developing your topic as you write about it in the next paper.
• Each source must be listed as a reference citation. You should follow each reference citation for the 6 sources with a short paragraph of 3–4 sentences in which you comment on the source. You should comment on the author’s main points and how the source may be of use to you when writing your paper.
  • Did you find any strong arguments in the source that you had not thought of?
  • Did the source make you rethink your position in any way?
  • Did you see any facts, statistics, quotes, or examples that you could use to support your thesis?
• Each reference citation must be in APA format. Several resources are available to help you format your reference citations in correct APA style, including the following:
  • You can refer to your eBook, English Composition. In your textbook for this course, please see “Reference Style” on page 191. Sample reference citation formats begin on page 192.
  • You can use citation machines. The most popular and most accurate citation machines are as follows:
    • Citation machine 1
    • Citation machine 2

Each of the six entries should look like this:

Johnson, D. T. (2011). American capital punishment in comparative perspective. Law & Social Inquiry, 36(4), 1,033–1,061.

Comment–America is the only developed nation that still imposes the death penalty. All other industrialized nations abolished capital punishment in the late 20th century, according to the source. Another peculiarity: although the death penalty is common in America, executions are rare, leaving prisoners lingering on death row for decades. America has the largest death-row population than any nation on earth.

Checklist

• You should have 6 sources.
• Each source should be listed as an APA reference citation.
• A short commentary paragraph should follow each source.

  

Week 5 Assignment 3: Email Based on Listening Skills Scenario
Due Week 5 11/8/17

Your supervisor has asked to you write a brief email on the vacation policy changes to be distributed to staff. You will need to listen to a voice mail from your supervisor with instructions on how to create the email to announce the new vacation policy. The voice mail will include specific details that must be followed in creating the email. This audio voice mail can be found in your course shell.

Create an email message in which you:

1. Listen to your supervisor’s voice mail here.
2. Create a one to two (1-2) paragraph email with five to      seven (5-7) sentences that follows your supervisor’s      instructions.  
3. Target the appropriate professional audience.
4. Use appropriate language for professional audience.
5. Use correct email formatting.
6. Follow appropriate netiquette rules for electronic      communication.
7. Meet the 250-to-500-word minimum requirement.
8. Use correct sentence mechanics, grammar, spelling,      punctuation, and style.

Your assignment must follow these APA formatting requirements:

• Be typed, single-spaced, using Times New Roman font      (size 12), with 1-inch margins on all sides. Check with your professor for      any additional instructions.
• Include a cover page containing the title of the      assignment, the student’s name, the professor’s name, the course title,      and the date. The cover page is not included in the required length.

The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:

• Demonstrate understanding of the basic fundamentals of      communication.
• Develop and practice communication skills, including      skills in verbal, nonverbal, listening, writing, interpersonal,      perception, and critical thinking as appropriate for the audience.
• Use various electronic communication platforms in their      academic and professional work.
• Relate to the interpersonal and organizational dynamics      that affect communication in organizations.
• Analyze and assess effective communication.
• Use correct sentence mechanics, grammar, spelling,      punctuation, and style.
• Use technology and information resources to research      issues in communications.
• Write clearly and concisely about communications using      proper writing mechanics.

· Grading for this assignment will be based on answer quality, logic / organization of the paper, and language and writing skills, using the following rubric.

  

 Points: 150

Week   5 Assignment 3: Email Based on Listening Skills Scenario

 

Criteria

Unacceptable   Below 60% F

Meets   Minimum Expectations 60-69% D

Fair
70-79% C

Proficient
80-89% B

Exemplary
90-100% A

 

1. Create a one to two (1-2)   paragraph email with five to seven (5-7) sentences that follows your   supervisor’s instructions.
 

  Weight:  25%

Did not submit or incompletely   created a one   to two (1-2) paragraph email with five to seven   (5-7) sentences that follows your supervisor’s instructions. 

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Partially created a one to two   (1-2) paragraph email with five to seven (5-7) sentences that follows your   supervisor’s instructions. 

Satisfactorily created a one to   two (1-2) paragraph email with five to seven (5-7) sentences that follows   your supervisor’s instructions. 

Thoroughly created a one to two   (1-2) paragraph email with five to seven (5-7) sentences that follows your   supervisor’s instructions. 

 

2. Target the appropriate   professional audience.

Weight: 10%

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3. Use appropriate language for   professional audience.
 

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4. Use correct email formatting.
 

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5. Follow appropriate netiquette   rules for electronic communication.
 

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6. Meet 250-to-500- word minimum   requirement.
 

  Weight: 15%

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7. Use correct sentence mechanics,   grammar, spelling, punctuation, and style.
  Weight: 10%

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0-2 errors present

 

8. Follow APA formatting rules for   cover page.
 

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